It had been days since I'd slept and I was forced to sit through this 5-hour class about the history of medicine. As Professor Applewhite blabbed on and on about human anatomy my eyes slowly closed then opened back up quickly for the next 4 hours and 17 minutes left of class. My bed was calling my name, but I was determined to get my masters degree here at Princeton University. I knew it would all be worth it in the end. Once I get this degree I can finally become the successful anesthesiologist I never dreamed to be. Even though I hated all that science stuff, I heard their starting salary is substantial. And that’s exactly what I needed and I need it FAST. Well, at least fast enough to get my brother out of the ridiculous Foster Care System before they lay another spiteful hand on him again.
I had been fifteen and my brother was only three, living with our father in West Harlem. Our mother died while giving birth to him and our father couldn't take the pressure of two kids on his own, so he disappeared. From then on I wasn't only his sister but also his mother figure. But we managed. Now I’m in the middle of my second year at Princeton University, also known as the one of the best colleges in the country. When I was younger I didn't even dream of becoming a doctor. It's too much pressure for me having so much control over other people's life. I don't even have control over my own. I know it sounds weird but I actually wanted to become a mortician. Don’t judge.
“Hey Tianna, Wait up” exclaimed my best friend Megan while running after me.
As she finally caught up she said, “Where are you off to speeding like that?”
I replied, “ My next class starts in five minutes and it’s all the way across campus”. “Who cares” she nonchalantly said. “Anywho, what’s new with you? I havent spoken to you in a while” “I’m actually getting very impatient. Graduation is in two whole years and I really need that money to get Kyle out of that hell house. I’ve gotta come up with a better plan on getting this money faster.” I complained to Megan.
Megan had been my best friend since diaper days and she was the only person who understood my situation. I never really understood how we bonded so much because she was the total opposite of me. Reckless. Risky. Outspoken. That was all Megan.
Out of nowhere Megan screamed as if she was in a horror scene and someone just sliced her arms off. I looked at her like she was insane and questioned her “What the hell is wrong with you? That was my eardrum.” She grasped onto my arm tightly and whispered “I have an idea that’ll solve all of your problems. Are you ready to hear it?” By the looks of her facial expressions I knew she had a crazy idea, but I was still eager to hear it. “ So what’s this brilliant idea you speak of” I hesitantly asked.
“ You can become a exotic dancer”
“Hell No”
“C’mon! You need the money fast right?”
“A stripper? Okay, it’s official. Your on drugs Meg. We need to get you help”
“Nooo Tia, I’m serious. My brother’s bestfriend owns the club down on Murrow Street. Maybe he can hook you up wiht a job there”
For a second there I felt weird because I actually started to consider the offer. I really needed the money and most importantly I needed my brother back.
“So I can just get the job? Just like that?” I asked.
And that’s when it all began. In the matter of two weeks I was dancing on poles for money two nights a week at the club. I was no longer Tianna. I was Spice. A well known stripper from West Harlem. From one gentlemen's club to another. It wasn’t as bad as I thought. It was kinda fun, matter fact. It was definitely out of my comfort zone but I was earning over $10,000 every month.
After five to six months of working at club I was finally stable enough to buy my own condo, get my brother back and out of the system, and finally switch majors to what I actually wanted to become. It worked for me. Sometimes you have to do what you have to do. I learned that stripping isn't always about showing off your body and it actually helps you raise your confidence level. There was only one person to thank and that was Megan.
16 comments:
I really liked the twist that story took. Funny enough I was expecting her to talk about drugs but exotic dancing? I wouldn't have thought of that - love it when something happens that I don't expect.
You do a great job at grabbing the readers attention. Your story was almost humorous imagining a stripper.... at the prestigious Princeton University. But what I loved most was the message at the end. Your character, Tianna took something away from what people would consider a worthless act. She got a confidence boost. I enjoyed your story.
I loved this story. You made me realize that you cant always take others judgement and let it control your life.
Your short story was truly entertaining, Had my full attention, totally drawn to what you were saying. I loved it. I mean living life is difficult, and sometime you have to do things in order to get by. Write MOREEEE^.^
David said...
I never knew you could write so well it kept me entertained and i didn't look away till the last word. I believe you can extend this story and make it longer stronger and tell us more experiences you've had that led to this
You did a great job at keeping my attention. I was completely captivated by your sense of humor and did not lose interest one second in which I usually do. I enjoyed how you took a serious situation, but added your own sense of comicality to it to ensure the reader does not lose interest. I absolutely loved this story and got the whole concept.
Living in Brooklyn New York, you are guaranteed to have some kind of issue. This story applies to everyone from Brooklyn. Good job.
You did very well establishing the change in the story. Which was, after Meg friend suggested it, Tianna was very certain she was not going to be a dancer and then she warmed up to the idea. In the end, the theme is clear that "sometimes you have to do what you have to do". It was also nice that Tianna didn't get... addicted to dancing and actually accomplished her goals.
your story is attention graber
your story grabbed my attention and doesnt happen alot
i liked your story, i love the plot, doing what ever it takes, easy or hard, to help your brother
This is interesting and allot of people can relate to this
Rasheed P.
This story was very different from the others and had a different ending. It also shows that doing something different isn't always bad.
She was hungry to earn money for her brother to get out of the foster care system so she did it for love
i like that twist at the end
this was surreal and shows how people would do anything to provide for their family
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